A play

So I have written a play for American Drama class, and it's pretty stupid - but I thought I would send it for critique. I can't figure out how to post a word document so I am just going to send it in the email, but you can comment on this post what you think. For those that are in Advanced Creative Writing, how is that going?

Carrie

Copy of an email to KSUWritingGroup: "My updated "Second Childhood" stories"

Hi K-State Writing Group,

Here are my stories attached in this email; some of you may remember critiquing my Prologue (Story 1) and Chapter 1 (Story 2.) They've both been considerably updated. One sub-plot that I added to solidify Tony's reasoning behind leaving his fraternity buddies early to go home is that he gets rejected by an Overland Parker.

Moreover, if you prefer to make holistic critiques more so than line edits on the Review pane, you may review my prologue starting here: http://www.bigyesbomb.com/2009/12/second-childhood-prologue-pages-1-5_26.html and/or Chapter 1 starting here: http://www.bigyesbomb.com/2009/12/second-childhood-chapter-1-pages-1-5_26.html

Also, here are my future plans for the chapters ahead in my novel. I encourage critiques to that too: http://www.bigyesbomb.com/2010/01/future-plans-for-second-childhood.html

Finally, the protagonist has an online subplot where he chronicles his second childhood on his blog. Anything made by "TanakaToday" is in-character. Posts made by "ENG" are "behind-the-scenes" author featurettes. The protagonist's blog is at http://TanakaToday.blogspot.com.

Looking forward to some great critiques,

-CLS

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